▶ Your Answer : Some people think
that the government can ignore environmental issues if we can grow
economically large. economically develop. However, in
my opinion, this perspective is not true for two reasons. First of all, when
the government do not care about environment, many animals and plants will be
extinct. In addition, destruction of environment would damage our health.
To begin with, if we disregard environmental problems, it would affect many
animals’ habitats. Furthermore, a variety of plants should will have tolive in inferior
environment. It must be leads which will lead to enormous
extinctions and food chain will be devastated destroyed, too. As a
result, unbalance of ecosystem may harm our living places. Thus, the vicious
cycle would be repeated again and again in the environment. For example, the
renowned environmentalist Eric Applegate mentioned in a documentary that there
are more than 900 creatures which were extinct because of
environmental problems. Incidentally, he said this situation will have impact on our
society, too. It means, even if we have significant economic growth, we can’t won't be able to live in our
environment any more.
On top of that, the destroy of environment would have a bad effect on our
health. Environmental issues will get worse while we ignore them. And
these issues must influence on our health. Consequently, the wealth is
not important any longer because we can’t use our wealth. For instance,
according to the survey conducted by UCLA’s research department, 79 percent of
the participants answered that their health is not good as much as it was in
the past. They added that the cause of reason for this
degeneration is poor environment where they live in. It means the environment
and our health is deeply related with each other.
To sum up, many habitats where many creatures live would be destroyed,
which leads to extinctions many habitats with many living things
are destroyed, which will lead to mass extinction. Moreover,
environmental issues would influence on our physical system
negatively. In this regard, I think that the government should manage
environmental problems.
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2
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2
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Limited 10-16
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