이번주 시험인데 통합형 템플릿을 급하게 바꿔보았습니다. 다른 고수님들의 눈으로 볼 때 많이 어색하지 않은지 확인받고 시험장에 가서 써먹는 게 좋을 것 같아 이렇게 급하게 첨삭 요청합니다.
부탁드립니다. 그리고 감사합니다!
(주제는 해커스 Actual Writing 젤 첫번째 문제-wave farms-입니다)
In the given set of the materials, the reading passage and the lecture both deals about wave farms. The reading passage suggests three advantages of the wave-energy facilities. The lecturer, however, rebuts the reading’s view based on the following three issues.
First, the speaker maintains that wave farms do not produce constant and predictable energy. The harsh marine environment causes such a technical problem that the generation capacity of wave-energy facilities is fluctuated. This idea is in contrast to the author’s opinion that wave-energy facilities are reliable generators of power.
Next, the lecturer explains that wave farms is harmful for environment. The convertors of wave-energy facilities produce toxic chemical which contaminates marine organisms. This is in opposition to the reading passage’ view that wave farms is environmentally friendly.
Finally, the lecture says that wave-energy facilities give a negative impact on the natural beauty of surrounding areas. The facilities are not only painted with bright colors but also located in shores. Therefore, it is highly visible and many visitors can easily detect them. This differs from the author’s idea that wave farms do not provide a negative effect on the beauty of the surrounding landscape.