부러운 어휘력과 표현들입니다. ^^;;;
쩝~ 저도 시험볼때 저런 단어들이 떠오르면 얼마나 좋을까요.
저도 잘 모르는터라 훑어보기만 했습니다.
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│ In some countries, people are no longer allowed to smoke in many public places and office buildings. Do you think this is a good law or a bad rule? Use specific reasons and examples to support your positions.(공공장소 흡연금지, 좋은법, 나쁜법)
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│ It has been argued that laws banning smoking in public places represent an infringement on the “rights” of smokers to smoke when and where they please. Smokers may argue that if speech and worship can have legal protection, then why not smoking as well? This is, however, simply a specious analogy. I think that stautory 오타 아닌가요? restrictions on smoking are good rules for some reasons.
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│ First, smoking is harmful both to the smoker and to bystanders who breathe the smoke which he or she emits. It is generally accepted that one who is in the habit of smoking is more likely to have diseases than non-smokers. One painful story about my relatives tells that vividly. My grandfather smoked a lot of cigarettes from his early ages, so he died of lung cancer when he was 60 years old. To make the matter worse, my grandmother who had lived with him for almost 40 years died two years after his death for the same reason. Therefore, although one reasonably may may reasonably claim the right to indulge in a harmful practice when alone, one may not claim a right to inflict harm on others by thay that practice in public.
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│ Moreover, smoking makes the places around the smoking area unplesant.
│ If the smoke diffuses through the air, at first it becomes difficult for people in pubic buildings to breathe, and then with the smoke, the cigarette butts and ashes can make the surrounding places dirty and filthy. In my office, there are several rooms, one of which has smokers, some of which have non-smokers, however one can easily find the differences between them only by smelling the air and looking at the desk of in the rooms. Thus, smoking in public places creates unclean environment.
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│ To sum up, even though smoking may be the personal taste, smoking in the places where many people are around should not be the smoker’s right for because of danger to other people’s health and places’ clean environment.
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