▶ Your Answer :
Undoubtedly, selecting jobs plays a
significant role in people’s daily lives in many of the places where they work
or play. Some people think that it is better for young people to select a job
in the same filed as their parents than to choose a different career for
themselves, while others do not. Both sides may have their own reasons to
support their views. If I had to choose one, I would say that selecting a
different career for themselves would be better for them. There are reasons as
follows.
Most of all, this can improve their sense
of responsibility. Selecting a different career from their parents requires
many obligations such as respecting others, abiding by rules, and being
independent. When such obligations are fulfilled, it is likely to bring a
better result in their work performance. For example, my oldest brother was
always lazy and selfish. He has changed little by little after he started to
work for Chinese restaurant, which was in front of my father’s gas station. Now
he plays his parts better, cooperate with others, and even encourage others to
be more responsible. Without this experience, he would have been irresponsible.
Moreover, this allows young people to
broaden their perspective. Working for different places from their parents would
help them to undergo new experiences, to handle difficulties that have never
faced before, to build relationship with people from different backgrounds. When
such activities are done, it is likely to be beneficial for widening their
views. For instance, my youngest brother was a writer who wrote about dreary
emotion which he earned when he worked for my parent’s gas station. However,
when he moved to an advertisement company, his style has totally changed. He
wrote incredible journals on journey to Mexico and this earned him a lot of
money. With the spread of his articles, he could improve his own horizons and
even others’. If it were not for this experience, he would have been a man of
limited scope.
To sum up, the advantages of young people
selecting a job which is different from their parents’ career far outweigh
those of choosing a job in the same field as their parents. The importance of
choosing different jobs from their parents’ career cannot be overestimated in
life. Good: 24~30 점수: 27 지적할 것이 별로 없는 독립형 에세이입니다. 독립형 에세이에서 가장 중요하다고 생각하는 부분은 본인의 에세이를 통하여서 상대방을 설득 할 수 잇냐 입니다. 지금 이 에세이는 이러한 부분에서 아주 효과적으로 잘 서술 되어있다고 생각합니다. 앞으로도 이렇게 계속 에세이를 서술하시다보면 원하는 점수를 얻을 수 잇다고 생각합니다. 수고많으셨습니다.
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