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The reading and the listening both argue about the use of wave-energy facilities. While Although the reading points out the benefits of using it, the lecturer contradicts this statement.
First, the reading passage claims that wave farms are reliable due to constant and predictable patterns of waves they use to produce power. However, the lecturer says that the energy can be disrupted by technology problems of facilities. Since new technology is utilized, the facilities can be broken down by harsh marine condition. For instance, if a converter of the farm is broken down, the amount of energy produced will fluctuate widely. Thus, the wind farms cannot be considered as reliable energy generators.
Secondly, the reading contends that wave farms are good for keeping clean environment since they do not release any pollutants into air or include any bad fuels that can be released into ocean. In the contrary On the contrary, the lecturer points out that they do contain harmful chemicals that can negatively impact on marine ecosystem. One common kind of chemicals is used in many turbines and moving parts to allow them move freely. The chemicals are highly toxic and can harm the marine organisms if they leak into the water.
Finally, the reading argues that the facilities do not ruin the beautiful scenery of natural environment since they are quite small and stay below the water surface. In contrast, the lecturer refutes it by saying that the wind farms are highly visible due to bright colors of paints they have. The bright colors are used in order to let shipping vessels notice the facilities and avoid them. Also Moreover(문장을 시작할 때 되도록이면 also를 안 쓰면 좋을 거 같아요), because they are close to shore, tourists from beach can easily notice them. Therefore, they negatively impact the surrounding landscape. Good: 24~30 점수: 26 서로 상반된 리딩과 리스닝을 아주 잘 비교한 거 같아요. 통합형 에세이에서 가장 중요한 것은 리딩과 리스닝을, 적절한 에세이 구조에서 얼마나 잘 분배했나 입니다. 지금 이 에세이에서는 그러한 부분이 가장 잘 담겨져 있는 거 같아요. 특히 리딩 부분이 부족함 없이 모든 정보가 들어간거 같습니다. 하지만 제가 참석한 것에서 보여진거 같이 전치사 사용에 있어서 문제가 있는 데 보고 참고하시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셨습니다. |