■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Topic : 스타 토플 실전 writing 실전모의고사 7번 |
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▶ Your Answer :
In the reading passage, there is
ample support for the author's claim that violence in video games is harmful
to players. However, the professor in the lecture gives several reasons as a
rebuttal to the author's point.
First, the speaker contends that
bullying and fighting have been long-term problems since the old time while sales of
video games have been increased for the past few years. This casts doubt on the reading
passage's claim that playing violent games results in increased possibility of
bullying and fighting.
Next, the woman in the listening/lecture insists that video
games could help players to increase their sense of ethics, team-work, and
humbleness through various aspects of games. It also helps them to understand
why cheating is bad. This counters the reading passage's assertion that violent
video games explicitly reward acts of violence.
Finally, the teacher argues that
children are able to tell difference of fantasy and reality when they reach 7
years old, according to phycologists. This refutes the reading passage's
suggestion that young children might have difficulties differentiating between
their video game character's life and their own. |
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점수: 23/30
1. 분량이 전체적으로 너무 적습니다. 인트로 3문장 이상으로 해주시고 디테일을 많이 추가해주세요.
2. This refutes~ 이런 식으로 하는 것 보다는 On the contrary, In contrast 와 같은 연결어를 써주시는 것을 추천드립니다.
3. 단복수 사용에 있어서 헷갈리는 부분이 좀 많으신 것 같습니다. violence는 보통 단수로, sales는 복수로 많이 씁니다.
수고하셨습니다. *^^*