There is a controversial issue regarding whether doing work by machine is beneficient. Two different opinions exist in respect of the issue. After pondering upon several aspects I personally agree with the idea that it is more efficient to do work by machine than by hand for two reasons.
To begin with, working by machine is beneficient because it helps to people save time and enhance work efficiency. The reason is that machine is faster than human hand and more convenient. My experience could be an example. 3 months ago, I had to write an essay as an assignment. I used to write my essay with hand. So I tried to write it with my hand like the other days, but it took so much time and my arm was really soar. So I starteded to write letter it with my computer. After I finished my work, I realized that I finished my assignment one hour earlier than usual before. Thanks to my computer, I could finish my work much more faster and enjoy my additional free time. I could do another homework and take a rest earlier. If I had not used my computer, I would not have done my work so fast and enjoyed free time.
On top of that, working by machine is much more economical. This is because machine can produce more products than human hand. According to a research done by Seoul National University, 68 out of 100 CEOs have agreed that doing work by machine could save money than doing the same work by hand. This is because, due to the mass production system, machine can produce a lot of products with a lower price. In one case, a famous clothes factory started to use machine in producting thier their new clothes. After using machine, the ceo CEO found that his plant produced clothes doubled two times more than before. Moreover he could save money because unlike human employees, the ceo CEO does did not have to pay wage for his machine. As a result, the CEOs recommended this method to others in order to be more economical. This shows that using machine help people save money.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that my standpoints of two reasons are sufficiently convincing. The first is that working by machine allows people to save time and increase work efficiency. The second is people could be more economicial when they work by machine. In this regard, I believe that working by machine is beneficial.
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