Some people think that a hasty decision can be the right one. However, in my opinion, hasty decisions are not able to being the preper one cannot be proper concerning the fact that people cannot consider what is going on around them and that if people spend enough time to make a decision, they can use their own experience for help which is helpful to their decisions.
To begin with, people will not be able to consider their situation with hasty decision making. As people have to choose their future in a short time fast, as their ability to take other facts into consideration is being less delicated. Take myself in an example. When I was in high school, I had to decide whether i to join in the hip-hop club. At that time, I was fallen fell in love with a boy in the hip-hop club so in order to stand out to him, I decided to join the club without deep consideration. However, the actual situtation was different with my thought. Even though I became the member of group, I had no opportunites opportunity to associate with him since there were so may girls around him them. In a sense, I regretted to not going to the cooking club because hip-hop music was really not my style and I had to sing and dance in front of the club members. Also, this club are required to have regular meetings regularly every saturdays so I could not have time to enjoy my own leisure time.
Moreover, there is a possibility to use reflect on people's own experiences if they have enough time to decide make their choices. I believe experience is one of the most essential factors in decision making. Imagine that people only use their thoughts in deciding what to do their works. The results of choices will be so narrow (무슨 의미로?). By considering their experiences, their decisions will be successful. There was a case in my university which illustrates my point very well. There was the project of making school beautiful and it was planned and implemented in 7 days even though there was a case resulted in failure due to the mistake in time estimation calculation. A usual university's project takes at least 14 days but it was done like that since the professionals of people from other universities would visit my university. However, the facilities in my university cannot could not handle the hasty plans and finally the project was finished in fail resulted in a failure. This case proves the importance of the consideration of experience.
To sum up, taking considering the situation occurred around people and significance of using experiences, hasty decision is seemed seems to be not unreasonable. In this sense, I firmly hold that a relaxed decision is the right one.
Writing 0-30 scale
Fair (21-22)
두 point를 잘 설정하고 설명하셨는데, 문법 면에서 부족한 부분이 많습니다. 특히 동사의 의미, 시제, 형태, 능/수동 등에 신경을 쓰세요. 대명사 I는 언제나 대문자로 써야하는 것도 잘 아시지요? 그밖에 어색한 표현은 본문에 수정했으니 참고하세요.