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Opinions might be divided over the
statement that being alone is the best way to get rid of their stress and
relax. People from various ages and different walks of life may take diverse
opinions on this issue. Some people would argue that spending time alone is an effective
way to take a break without other's interruption being interrupting. However, in my opinion, I
disagree with this idea since there are better ways to relieve stress and take
a break.
To begin with, stress can be reduced by
talking with friends and sharing problems. Specifically, when people have some
troubles, most of them want to be supported emotionally comforted by someone. Let us take me as an
example, when I failed to entering the university on my first try, I felt was very much
depressed and did not know what to do for myself. I could not even set my mind
again due to a big depression. At that time a lot of people around me cared me
and took me out for fun. One of my best friend, HY, she came to my home every
day to talk to me. Then I realized that I was breaking through the problems and
coming out of bad mood. (Need concluding sentence)
On top of that, by doing some group activities
people can remove their concerns. This is because it will help people forget
about their problems, and enjoy the moment when they are participating group
activities. For example, my brother, JH is always out for sport clubs, such as a
football club on every Saturday and a tennis class twice a week. He said that
it is an easy way to get rid of all the worries and relieve tensions by concentrating the
activities. Furthermore, in the sport club, he could meet many people who had
same experiences before, and they could help him by giving some useful tips and
advices.
To sum up, there were many advantages that
people could relax and relieve stress by getting along with people, I recommend
people to interact with other people when they are in bad mood or under the
stress situation.
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