Whether parents should set strict rules for their children if they want them succeed in their life or not is a general issue undergoing serious debate. Two different opinions exist regarding this issue. After pondering the opinions from several perspectives, I personally agree that parents do not need to set strict rules for their children’s success. Firstly, their children can make their own way without attention of their parents and secondly, they can lose self-confidence by following several strict rules.
Some may oppose to the opinion, but first it assures that parents do not need to set strict rules for their children’s success. This is because their First, children can make their own way and future without parental attention of them, which means that they are already independent, so they can decide their own future and work. This controversy has been a debate among the modern society to discuss what is beneficial to one’s life. I had often discussed with my friends holding different opinions. Initially, I thought that setting strict rules for their children is more effective because their parent’s advices and thinking would be helpful for them. However, as a result from the intense discussion, I deeply considered that not setting strict rules is more helpful for them because they have right to decide their own work and have freedom. (근거가 전혀 제시되지 않고 있습니다. 논리를 갖추는데 아무런 도움이 되지 않는 사족을 줄이고 제대로 된 설명을 해주세요.)
On top of that, not setting strict rules is important for children because they would have no self-confidence taking strict rules. I mean that they would have a few chances to behave as their own thinking, so they will be depressed and lose their self-confidence. Interestingly, this Friday, a renowned professor of Saint Louis University in this field published an editorial in his research and as a result, his study supported my view. The majority of all respondents (어떤 사람들?) preferred that parents should not set strict rules for their children. This is because their behavior for their children could destroy their confidence and independence. While following some strict rules, they would not represent their own opinion freely. Then, they could feel depressed and would lose passion be not an active person. In other words, they act as just only according to their parent’s hope, so and I think it is not good for their children.
To sum up, parents should not set several strict rules because their children would lose self-confidence and because they have ability to do their work properly and decide their future. Consequently, The importance of my view cannot be underestimated for the reasons that I have mentioned above.
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