There might be some people who believe that educational institutions should focus on specific careers and fields rather than general subjects. However, I personally disagree with above idea for two subsequent reasons. This is because students cannot should be able to receive well-balanced education and learning general subjects is helpful for students’ future career.
To begin with, well-balanced education is very significant for students. Universities and high schools should teach their students general principles suca such as virtue, morality and ethics for making to make them as mature people. If the schools educate students only detailed knowledge, they would lose a chance to learn more important values. Some people might say that learning concrete knowledge would be more siginficant significant for students to seek jobs in the competitive society, however but this ignores essential values that students have to acknowledge for their lives. I read an article in a newspaper that a majority of successful leaders said they were inspired by studying general subjects. In other words, by learning general subjects, they extended their ways of thinking, and learned how to understand other people and societies. This clearly shows that teaching general subjects is a crucial way to raise students to mature people.
On top of that, students’s future careers can benefit from learning general subjects. This is due to the fact that students can be exposed to be diverse knowledge by learning general subjects. By studying them, young students are able to find their interests and talents, which can be beneficial when they look for a new career path or work in their fields. Let me bring my personal experience as an example. When I majored in music in university, I did not want to learn other subjects except for music, since I thought that I was well aware of what I wanted to learn. However, my university required all students should to take some of general subjects during the freshman year, so I reluctantly enrolled literature as a general subject. At first, it was so tedious, but I had gradually became interested in it as times went by. After then, I decided to minor in literature, and now I become a literature teacher in high school. If I had not studied literature, I would not have found the my current occupation. This demonstrates that learning general subjects can be useful for students to find their interests.
To sum up, studying general subjects gives students well-balanced education and benefits their future career. In this regard, I strongly contend that universities and high schools should teach students general subjects.
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