news media is a reliable source of unbiased informationnews media play News media plays a very important role in today's society since many people use the news media when they want information.some people believe that news media is not a reliable source of biased information such as discrimination of race as it sometimes manifest the discrimination of races, while other people think differently. If I were asked to say your opinion, I would mention that news media is a reliable source of unbiased information. There are several reasons and example as follows. I personally believe, news media is a reliable source of unbiased information for the following two subsequent reasons.
To begin with, I think that news is so trusty media because they can't cannot freely spew a information in society. In other word, news media always are overseen is overseen by a government in order to inhibit the tilted think of information from news media. Therefore, news media have has to stay in neutral position. For example, when in 2014, the affair occurred in Korea which is that ship was sunken during a field trip and it contained the much students, further many studentswas died because of late salvage of government. were dead. Then many news media had informed this affair but one of the media spewed the eccentric rumor, reason of late salvage due to surgery of president's crease, president Bag's status was plummeted due to rapidly spread the rumor in sns. But after, the media no longer inform the eccentric rumor because of limit of government.
On top of that, many people use the news media to search diverse information such as fiance of world or weather, so they can not inform biased or mistaken information. what I mean is, if news media state states biased notion such as black people is are not sanitary, they will be criticized by many groups of black people and group of Fair race, also if
they state the untrue information such as detailed weather of date, any people will not trust media then that media will have to greet demise. For instance, when 2009, the epidemical influenza was used by some media due to surge of patients of influenza. the media Kbw had introduced about several ways to cure influenza, which is to embed green onion into anus of people and etc few weeks after, these methods were revealed to lie.
then this media company collapsed, since losing the trust from citizens.
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일단 문법적인 오류들이 잇습니다. 제가 첨삭한 것을 보시고 숙지하시길 바랍니다. 또한 문제가 된다라고 생각하는 부분은 단락들을 통해서 무슨 말을 하려고 하는 것인지 잘모르겠습니다. 명확하게 본인의 의견이 이렇다 라는 것이 나타나지 않았습니다. 이러한 이유중에 하나는 일단 문법적인 부분에 있다고 생각합니다. 이러한 부분들을 숙지하시길 바랍니다. 또한 독립형 에세이 구조에 있어서 결론도 필요한데 지금 이 에세이는 결론이 없습니다. 결론을 서술하시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셨습니다.