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There are so many ways to make friends, such as club or community activity and or traveling.
I think early mentioned activities are also good ways to make friends. (Wrong sentence, Not matched with your opinion suggested next: however~) However,
in my opinion, I believe that the best ways for a student to make friends is
participating in a sport team. There are two reasons for that. Participation in
a sport team can give a student a sense of fellowship and it can also enable
them to enhance the communication skills by teamwork. (Choose only one)
Firstly,
participating in a sport team can give a student a sense of fellowship. People
can feel the a sense of belonging bonding when they join in a certain group where the team
members meet each other daily and exercise together. For example, the soccer
player in a team can feel the fellowship as he practices with his team members. He
cannot practice it like in a real setting without other team members the sport if his team members are absent. So the presence of team the existence of
his practice mate is very necessary for him to improve the soccer skill and
ultimately they become interdependent each other and friend. So I strongly
believe that the best ways to make friends is participating in a sport team.
Secondly,
playing sport with other members enables a student to improve their
communication skills. When participating participation in a sport team, people should
communicate each other to achieve their optimum performances. As a result,
improved communication skills can make people more intimate and became friends.
For instance, the soccer players who exercises with their team members on a daily basis are deeply understanding the meaning of their team member’s wording or action. (What does it mean?) By doing so As they do so, they can properly react on their partner’s action and have a
chance to become friends. In this regard, I think joining in a sport team is best the efficient ways to make friends.
To
sum up, I strongly believe the best ways to make friends is participating in a
sport team for the following reasons, firstly joining a sport club can give a
student a sense of fellowship and secondly, it also enables a student to more
communicate well with their team members.
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