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Some people think that moving to a new place makes people feel stay away to far from their old friends. However, I have a different idea. First of all, today's developed social communication system allows people to keep in touch from even a long distance. Secondly, they can move easily with the improved transportation methods.
To begin with, today, there are a lot of communication technologies such as Social Network Service(SNS), smartphone and E-mail service. Since people can exchange conversation with this methods regardless of the place and time, they can maintain a relationship with their old friends. For example, my best friends, Ara, moved to other country 2 years ago. However, we could can hear each other's voice by talking on the smartphone and send a text message but also use a message system too. Moreover, without direct conversation, we can see the recent experience of friends through the SNS. Moreover, since we became hard to have an actual meeting, we tried to maintain a relationship deeply harder and exchange messages more many time than ever before. This long distance made our relationship stronger.
On top of that, today people today can displace even different countries easily with the high-qualified transportation system. Today, there are a lot of means to move to other places such as the car, subway and ship. These methods decreased the time to commute than before. Also, airplane can allow people to move to other country in a very short time. For instance, according to research from the University of Maryland, they compared to the average travel time of the same distance between the today and 20 years ago. The result was very intriguing. Today's people spend 80% less time to commute at the same places than the people 20 years ago. Moreover, today's developed airplane allowed people to reduced twice of the time to go to other countries than 20 years ago. This result shows obvious fact that today's people easily meet their friends who live in far place.
To sum up, developed communication system and transportation way enabled people to maintain the relationship with people who live in the long distance.
In this regard, I agree that the people can keep their old relationship even they live in the far distance.
채점기준표 | Grammar | Contents | Example | Coherence |
점수 | 3 | 3 | 3 | 2 |
Score | Fair 17-20 | - Tech/Transportation이라는 합당한 논지를 가져오신 것 같습니다. - 다만, 두 번째의 경우는 "운송시간이 적게 걸린다"에 보다 비중을 맞춘 것 같아, Topic의 관련성이 다소 적어진 느낌이 들어요. - Lose old friends if one moves to a new city or a country 라는 토픽에 더욱 중점적으로 자신의 주장을 반영해야 합니다. |