▶ Your Answer :
You can have strong solidarity in a small
university. On the other hand, you can have diverse connection in a big
university. One can lean strong solidarity in a small university whereas in big college there a large network connection. (에세이에서는 you를 서술하시면 안됩니다. 이인칭 주어보다는 삼인칭 주어로 에세이를 서술하시길 바랍니다.) Although each university has different strengthen strength, I prefer a big
university for two reasons.
First of all, a big university provides a
wider range of lectures than a small university due to the number of faculties.
Thus, there are more chances to learn in various ways. For example, when I was
a university student, I always hesitated to choose lectures. My major was
public administration and it had lots of lectures with a single theme such as
philosophy of public administration, law of public administration and finance of
public administration. As each professor looked at the study from different
points of views, I could broaden my horizons on my major. Before going to the
university, I thought that if I go to a small university, I can have strong
solidarity with my professor. Also, he divulges more about my major so that I
can be an expert of the field. Of course, the solidarity is important, however,
I realized that there was such a lot of world to see before immersing in one
field. Thus, I decided to go the big university to extend my knowledge. 지금 예시에 대한 설명은 개연성이 안좋습니다. 차라리 처음에 나온 정보에 대한 예시에 중점을 두는 것 이 좋을 거 같습니다. 결속감을 늘려줬다에 대한 부분은 적절치 않는 거 같습니다
Second, a big university has voices of
intellectuals. Diverse opinions are expressed and shared in a class. Also, the
university accepts exchange students. It is the place full of a variety of
backgrounds. Add to many kinds of lectures, many people are in the university
and this means that many utterances of lectures exist during a discussion.(이 부분에 대한 설명이 필요할 꺼 같습니다. 무슨말을 하려고 하는 건지 잘 모르겠습니다) When
I studied philosophy of public administration, I could make friends from
different departments such as art, Korean literature, and economics. While
discussing, it was hard to reach an agreement because each field insisted own
importance. However, these factors in turn led us to a high-level solution. We
were not destined for the solution, however, the more we narrow down, we could
find a common denominator.
To sum up, I think that going to a big
university gives us more chances to learn and meet a lot of things because many
studies and people exist. Fair: 17~23 점수: 21 일단 설명이 부족한 거 같습니다. 각 바디에 대한 예시가 개연성이 부족한 거 같아요. 개연성이 필요한 이유는 이 에세이를 통해 어떠한 말을 하려고 하는 것인지 알 수 있기 때문에 좀 더 개연성이 높은 예시들을 서술하시길 바랍니다. 또한 무슨 말을 하려고 하는 것인지 잘 모르겠는 부분들이 잇습니다. 이러한 부분들을 항상 주의하면서 에세이를 서술하시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셨습니다. |