▶ Your Answer :
Cars and airplanes are both groundbreaking
inventions and they play a significant role in people’s lives. Some people
think cars have made a bigger impact on society than airplanes, while others
think differently. If I had to choose one, I would say airplanes have had a greater
effect on our society. There are several reasons and examples as follow.
First, in comparison to cars, airplanes
have made peoples’ lives much more convenient. this is because airplanes have significantly
reduced the amount of time for travel and transportation. In the past before
airplanes were invented, people were only able to travel by using territorial or
marine transportation system, which takes a longer time than by travelling in
the air. As a result, people can travel to far areas, such as other continents,
in a shorter time. Furthermore, as companies can deliver goods more quickly,
trade between countries have been vitalized and people can easily purchase the
goods from other countries in a short period time. For example, I traveled to Europe
and America once a few years. Also, I can buy kiwis from New Zealand and bananas
from the Philippines at the market whenever I want to. If airplanes had not
been invented, I would not be able to relish this lifestyle.
On top of that, airplanes have negatively affected
the society as well. The invention of weapons such as missiles enabled people
to start a war with a far country. For example, during World War 2, Japan’s missile
attack against the US was a trigger to that spread the war worldwide, involving US into the war making the US
involved. Furthermore, this type of weapons are far more destructive as they
can attack from above the ground, resulting in massive killings. The use of
missiles have resulted in millions of deaths and casualties of soldiers as well
as civilians until now. For instance, nuclear bombs carried by the US air force avian
army killed thousands of people and devastated the nearby areas. Without the
creation of airplanes, far less people might have been killed or injured.
All things considered, I strongly believe
that airplanes have greatly influenced the society in both good way and bad way
for those reasons I have mentioned above. In this regard, the importance of
airplanes in our daily lives cannot be overestimated.
예상점수: 24-27 총평: 글을 논지에 맞게 깔끔하게 잘 써주셨고 이유와 내용도 모두 적절하게 제시해주셨습니다. 다만 두번째 바디에서 약간씩 fluency문제와 어휘 문제가 있네요. 이것을 제외하고는 문법적인 오류는 많지 않습니다. 전체적으로 잘써주셔서 실수만 조금씩 유의하시면 될 것 같아요. 수고 많으셨습니다.
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