▶ Your Answer : These days, many people like to eat their meals out of their home. Some people believe that eating food at restaurant is more convenient. However, I strongly believe that cooking or eating at home is more cheaper than eating at outside and people can become healthier. First of all, people can save their money. (How?) This is because if people are planning to eat their meals at restaurant, they have to pay for their own transportation fee and meals. Also, they have to give tips to waiter or waitress. Restaurants are expensive and even they don’t know what each people’s flavor, so people would eat what they do not want to eat. From To take my experience as an example, our family usually prefer to eat foods at home because we do not have to gather together on specific days. (Why's that?) Also, it has we can have more time to talk each other while helping home cooking with mom. Instead of wasting our money on eating-out expenses, we have our own accounts in the bank so we can rather donate our valuable money to and help poor people. Therefore, having a meal at home is more economical because it reduces people’s unnecessary money. On top of that, people can eat more healthier food in their house because home-made food is more safer than outside. People can watch their making food-making process and it decreases numerous diseases such as food-posing. (What is it?) In addition, people can choose what they want to eat and they can cook foods with more sufficient nutrients. For instance, before my family like to eat inside at home, we often visited came to famous restaurant once a week. The taste was terrible and even it smelled bad right after we ate it all. As a result, our whole family came to hospital for stomachache and we stayed for a few days in there. Thus, making meals at home makes people stay strong body state. To sum up, going to the restaurant food store costs a lot of money and people cannot see what they are doing on foods. In this regard, I think cooking and eating meals inside at home is much beneficial for our body and people can invest their money on other activities they like to do.
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