▶ Your Answer : It is of great worth to discuss whether the strict rule is needed or not for the children’s future success. However, the answer to this question can vary depending on each individual’s perspective. As far as I am concerned, I think it is not needed to set strict rules for their children since these strict rules could distract children to be more independent and be more creative, which is also related to their future success.
To begin with, strict rules are not needed although they are young. [This is not thesis] Of course, certain rules are need since children don’t know exactly what is right and wrong. But this should be is just a guidance and direction to their path, not the strict rules. This or could distract children to be more independent even in the future. During this age, children can be affected easily so it is important to set the right direction and to form the stable personality. A close friend of mine is the perfect example for this. When my friend was young, his mother didn’t set the strict rules for him. This does not mean that his mother didn’t love and have any interest on her child. Instead, his mother gave him a great freedom to choose on his own life and gave proper direction to him wisely. It was just a way to respect her child. This made him to think himself and even his life independently. So when he grew up as an adult, he was used to decide every choice by himself and became more independent. This example indicates that not setting strict rules could help the children to be more independent.
On top of that, strict rules could limit the children to broaden their perspective and to be more creative. To be more specific, if the parents set the strict rules on the children’s early age, their capability could be limited. The strict rules are just the adult’s standard. [Clarify it] So, if the parents want to communicate with their children, they have to set the rules from the children’s point of view. According to the MOSA, which is one of the most famous research center in South Korea, the children who were not exposed to the environment that they have to follow strict rules when they are young, are much more creative than the children who were. This shows that adult’s strict rules on their children could distract them to expand their thinking and perspective. And this ultimately would not help children to have more successful life in long run.
To sum up, I think it is better not to set strict rules to the children, especially in their early age. Children absorbed quickly and be affected easily. Thus, strict rules could disturb children to be independent and to be creative. Those characteristics also directly influence the children’s personality and even their future success.
채점기준표 | Grammar | Contents | Example | Coherence | 점수 | 4 | 4 | 3 | 3 | Score | Fair 19-23 | - 두 번째 예시에서는 단순히 실험 결과를 보여주는 것이 아니라, 어떠한 형태의 strict rule이 아이들의 creativity 촉진을 방해하였는지에 대하여, 상세히 적어주셔야 합니다.
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