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Some people think that homework is should not
be given on every day, because it can make students stressed out. However, in
my opinion, it should be given on a daily basis because of the following advantages. To begin with, daily assignment can raise student’s
own educational abilities. If the homework not be is not given every day, most of the
students tend to do not spend their time on the study and do some other
entertainments instead of the learning. However, if the school gave gives assignments
every day, students have to invest their time on the assignments. Although it is not
conducted by student’s own willing, but it eventually helps the student to study.
For example, I was not investing my time on my homework before my teacher gave
me the daily basis homework. I usually hang around with my friends and watched television animation to spend my lest time after the class. However, after my
teacher gave me a daily basis assignment, I had to spend my time on study, even
if I do not did not want to do it. As time passed by, I successively achieved my
homework and it helped me to get a great grade that I never had before. 일단 가장 크게 조심해야하는 부분은 문법적 요소 인거 같습니다. 시제에 맞게 동사를 활용 해야할 거 같습니다. 과거에 일에 대한 문장을 서술할 때 특히 경험에서는 무조건 그 경험안에 있는 문장들은 다 과거 시제로 에세이를 서술하여야 합니다. 이러한 부분에서 부족함이 있는 거 같습니다. On top of that, giving daily homework to students
prevent them from bad habit such as delay everything before the due date. If students
does do not do this homework every day and delay it, the amount of homework will become bigger. To resolve this huge amount of assignments, students have to pour their
best on this for several days, eventually they realize that the significance of
the time managements and they seldom to do postpone their work afterward. A
study conducted by the board of study in Korea is a good example of this. The
researchers tracked the habits of students who doing do daily assignments over a 2
years period in order to find out the correlation between postpone habit and
daily basis homework. What they found is intriguing. The students who doing do
daily basis homework rarely delay their work compare in comparison to the other who does not be was not
given daily assignments. This was because most the former students know that if
they delay one task, it eventually affects the further tasks, since they
experienced through postpone postponing their homework before. This study demonstrates
that the daily basis homework can prevent the students from the habit that
delaying something. 논리적으로 설명이나 예시들을 잘 풀어나갔습니다. 하지만 또한 문제가 되는 부분은 문법적 요인 입니다. 특히 이 에세이에서는 동사가 없는 부분도 있었고 students that~절에서는 동사를 사용하시는 것이 아닌 ing형태를 쓰실 때가 있었습니다. 이러한 부분을 꼭 고쳐주시길 바랍니다.
To sum up, daily basis homework has a great impact
on students. First, it can enhance students’ personal educational performance.
Moreover, it can prevent students from bad habit such as postpone postponing their task.
In this regard, I think that students should be given homework on a daily. Fair: 17~23 점수: 21 전체적으로는 논리적으로잘 서술 하셨습니다. 특히 각 바디에서 설명 부분에서 예시로 넘어가는 부분이 아주 매끄럽게 잘 서술되었습니다. 하지만 문제점은 제가 참석한 것처럼 문법적 오류들이 너무 많습니다. 이러한 문법적 오류들은 전체적인 에세이 플로우를 방해하기 때문에 꼭 고쳐야할 요소입니다. 따라서 꼭 고쳐주시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셧습니다. |