■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic : One should never judge by external appearances. |
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▶ Your Answer :
There is a good old proverb "don't judge a book by its cover." Lots of people emphasize one's inner traits such as personality, intelligence, and so on and tend to defame the value that the external appearance has. However, I disagree that one should never judge somebody by his external appearances because appearance reflects one's personality and external appearance is also a type of aptitude.
First, appearance reflects personality. This is not to say there is a certain type of appearances that match with every personality. (every 뒤에는 단수명사가 옵니다.) Instead, there is a correlation between one's personality and his appearances we see. For example, one can deduce if a person goes to school everyday with strangled, oily hair, then he is likely to be lazy or sleepyhead. The person who likes to take photo with full suit on is likely to have strong ego. Although these assumptions might be regarded as logically absurd, they were turned out to be true by the research of many psychologists. Their research (research는 불가산명사입니다.) are based on the fact that one's external appearance reflects the person's inner personality: the desire to be looking good to others.
Second, appearance is also a type of ability. People evaluate each other based on their aptitudes. For example, colleges want to select a student with higher intelligence because smarter students are likely to contribute more in developing the human knowledge. By the same reason, there are some people who evaluate the person by his appearance because better appearance is more suitable in their jobs. For example, many idol stars or movie actors are praised by the public because of their exquisite appearances. Clothing companies hire models to advertise their new clothes because people tend to buy more when person with better appearance advertises. External appearances, like the other abilities, are something that can make positive outputs in our society, and this should also be judged by someone who needs the power of appearance.
In conclusion, I don't think we should ignore external appearance when judging others because external appearance reflects one's inner personality and appearance is also important ability that someone has. It is true that some book with a dirty cover might contain a great knowledge or information. However, it is also true that no one will try to read that book. |
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논리 있게 잘 쓰신 것 같습니다.
문법 수정할 부분이 있기는 하지만 큰 오류는 아닙니다!
그리고 개인적으로는 conclusion이 좋았던 것 같습니다.
수고하셨습니다. *^^*
수고하셨습니다. *^^*