I think that Reading books is a classical way for people to spend their pastime. Wihle Watching movie is a fancy way to use their residual time. So I disagree with that idea (무엇에 반대한다는 것인지 제대로 써주세요.). (엔터 X) There are two main reasons why I think this way.
Firstly, watching movie gives us a better chance to communicate with other people. (엔터 X) I usually talk my church members about movies what that I watched, but when I tried to talk those with subject of books, I occasionally failed ocationally because people I tried to talk did not read book that I wanted to make as the topic of talking.
On top of that, whatching watching movies is more enjoyable than reading books because movie can convey the story more effectively. Books contain only letters, however while movies include others such as sounds and visualizations, which help to touch human emotion rise human's feeling.
Therefore I think whatching watching movie is a more satisfying pastime than reading books.
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