According to the reading passage's claim, using reusable bags can be more advantageous than using plastic bags. And The speaker also agrees and also claims that we can benefit from replacing plastic bags to reusable bags.
To begin with, the speaker states that we can reduce environmental waste by not throwing grocery bags away. The speaker takes an example of his family. His family usually does not discard grocery bags, but collect and reuse them constantly. And He says that reusing bags like this can be effective for save the environment, as it takes significantly long time to disintegrate plastic bags. This goes with the reading passage's claim that using reusable bags can contribute to reducing environmental waste, because many people simply throw plastic bags away after using them and it takes long time to disintegrate them.
On top of that, the speaker predicates that we can save money by using reusable bags. Although it is true that plastic bags are very cheap, the total amount of money would be significant because lots a lot of people are using a number of plastic bags. Therefore, if we start to use reusable bags, grocery stores might able to save lots of much money, and products prices would go down little bit. This goes with the reading passage's claim that using reusable bags could be financially helpful, because it can led lead to lower-priced products for consumers as stores do not have to spend money on offering bags.
Finally, the speaker asserts that using reusable bags can contribute to saving precious resources, such as petroleum and natural gases. Today tons of petroleum and natural gases are put into creating plastic bags, and it can be said that this process is wasteful. On the other hand, if we use reusable bags more, we can save these precious resources and use them more effectively effectevely. This goes with the reading passage's claim that using reusable bags will help save petroleum and natural gases, as these bags can be reused continuously.
Writing 0-30 scale
Good (25-26)
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