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There
might be some people who believe that smart devices cannot help students learn
effectively. However, in my opinion, students can get help from smart
devices effectively. First, students can save time to learn by using smart
devices. Second, smart devices can increase students' concentration.
To
begin with, students can access educational
materials in a second by using smart devices such as a smartphone, a laptop
computer, and a tablet PC. Therefore, they can use them in any time and any
places. Skeptics of my main line of arguemnt argument may argue that this reason does not sound
like a reasonable position at first sight. To their dismay, there exists an
abundance of examples that substantiate my claim. Here is one of them. When I
was in college, I led a hectic daily life. This is was because of intense
job competition. Joining internship programs and acquiring job certificates
were required. Developing foreign language proficiency was a necessity. In this
circumstance, I could not manage all these things, but I could save time for
doing these by using smart devices. I could take online lectures about a
certificate of computer skills, and English learning. Even in the subway, I
could take the courses by my smartphone, so I do did not need to spend extra time for taking classes about my
preparation for getting a job. Therefore, I was able to handle all of my duties
of school and job preparations.
On top
of that, students can more concentrate on lectures when using smart devices.
Smart devices can provide students with lots of
information in a variety ways such as movies, and motion pictures, so students
do not get bored easily than reading books. The
representative case that I narrated above is not the only evidence that support
my view. In a study conducted recently, a significant majority of survey
participants endorsed my point of view that smart devices actually increase
students' focusing. An high school teacher said in the survey
that when she teaches students by using smartphone apps in classes, students
show more concentration on the classes. However, when she uses only books, they
easily get bored and fall asleep. One professor
also mentions that smart devices provide us more impetus, so they make us
concentrate on something. This clearly shows that how the devices are effective
to study.
In conclusion, using smart
devices not only give allow students to save time, but also gives high
concentration. For these reasons, I strongly believe that smart devices are
helpful for students to study effectively.
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Comment: |
포인트를 잘 잡아주셨고, 근거도 잘
대주셨습니다. 흐름도 매끄럽고요. 작은 문법 오류들이 있어서 감점을 드렸습니다. 위 지적사항들을 참고해 주세요. 그리고 'Skeptics of my main line of arguemnt
argument may argue that this reason does not sound like a reasonable position
at first sight. To their dismay, there exists an abundance of examples that
substantiate my claim. Here is one of them' 이 문장은 많은 사람들이 복사 붙여넣기를 즐겨하는 문장이라,
최대한 사용을 자제를 해주시는 걸 추천드려요. |
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