▶ Your Answer : There might be some people who prefer to consider recommendation from friends friedns or information from magazines when they make a choice to buy something. However, I personally believe that reviews from online communities can have the greatest impact on decision making. This is because, the reviews are specific and reliable, but the other sources are untrustworthy. >space
To begin with, the reviews from online communities are quite convincing. The online reviews are quite specific because real consumers write them about the differences between website images and real products. Even some people make posting with photo copies to make their point. So, these reviews are reliable. Let me bring up my personal experience as an example. Several weeks ago, I tried to buy a dress for my cousin’s wedding. I didn’t have enought time to go shopping, so I decided to buy it online. However, I couldn’t find the exact information about its color and fits for me. So I searched a review of the clothes I wanted to buy on a consumer’s community. There were a lot of reviews on the product and these are , letting other consumers know about more specific information which can’t be obtainable on the website. I could make a wise purchase thanks to the online reviews. 질문은 '사람들이 어디에서 영향을 가장 많이 받는다고 보는가'이지 '어디를 참고하는 게 좋은지'에 대한 것이 아닙니다. 온라인 커뮤니티 리뷰의 신뢰도를 영향을 가장 많이 받는 이유로 연결해야 질문에 대한 답이 될 수 있어요. >space
On top of that, recommendation reccommendation from friends or information from magazines is unreliable. Most of businesses should provide some benefits to the magazine’s companies company to advertise their products on the magazines. So, some the articles of certain products on magazines are usually overdramatised their functions. Even more flattered reviews are on them. it. For instance, a few months ago, I read an article about a micro-oven with multiple functions. There were a lot of positive mentions and compliments about its the technically-intensive product. Before long, however, I found the news that the micro-oven’s company made official recall of the micro-oven for its malfunction in some parts. 마찬가지로 신뢰도와 관련된 설명만 제공해서는 '사람들이 어디에 영향을 가장 많이 받는지'를 답변할 수 없어요. 질문 내용에 맞게 내용 재구성이 필요합니다. >space
To sum up, online reviews can give the “real” information of the products consumers want to know and other sources are not persuasive. In this regard, I think it is better for me to consider the reviews from online communities to make the best option when I purchase something.
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논제 파악 effectiveness in addressing the task 적절한 설명 appropriate explanation 적절한 예증, 구체적 설명 appropriate exemplification, details 일관성, 단계적 구성 unity, progression, coherence 다양한 단어 구사 syntactic variety 적절한 단어 선택, 관용적 표현 word choice, idiomaticity Writing 0–30 score scale Limited (1-16) Fair (17-23) ✓ Good (24–30)
질문 내용은 사람들이 물건을 살 때 어디에서 가장 많은 영향을 받는가, 입니다. 어디를 참고하는 게 가장 좋은지 설명하는 것은 논점에 맞지 않는 답변이 되니 조심하셔야 해요. off-topic은 분량이나 구성이 만족스러워도 limited level대의 점수가 배정될 수 있으니 유의해주세요. 오탈자가 꽤 있는 편인데 글을 검토할 시간도 체크하면서 연습하시면 도움이 될 것 같아요. 문단 사이 엔터 치는 것도 체크해주세요~ 수고 많으셨습니다~! |