▶ Your Answer :
Undoubtedly, educational institution play a significant role in
student’s academic lives. Some people think that students have to learn about specific
occupation rather than general knowledge and subjects in educational institution,
while others do not agree on this. Both sides may have their own reasons to support their
view. If I had to choose one, I would say that students should be required to
learn about specific careers and jobs. There are several reasons as follows.
First of all, high school and university students can appeal to companies more and succeed in a job market succeed in
career these days when they focus more on learning about specific job fields
than on studying general subjects. As modern society is becoming rapidly
specialized and competitive, today’s job markets require job candidates with
such professionalism, because they want candidates who can work immediately
after graduation. Improving professional knowledge, they are likely to be more
competitive in finding a job. Tokyo University found a huge difference between
two groups of young adults. One group was consisted of those who took computer
programming courses at a high school, and other group was made up of those who
just took academic courses such as literature and history. The researchers
found that the former was more likely to have a higher employment rate than the
latter by 20 percent. In particular, the first group finished their projects
faster and had a higher accuracy in their results as well. This implies that
taking vocational classes is the key to professional success. Without it, one
would fall behind. (GOOD)
In addition, learning about one's own careers specifically improve students to be more confident about their future. When
they study what they want to be in their future through the job class in school
where they spend a lot of time, they can experience their dream in advance.
When students get a chance to experience their dream in advance, it is likely
to feel certain about their future and to be confident about social debut. For
example, when my sister was in high school, she often felt depressed thinking
that her ability is low to become a lawyer and academic subjects do not help her to
improve specific ability. To graduate in high school, she spent the whole day
studying all academic subjects. Fortunately, she got a chance to learn what she wanted to pursue as her career about
law in Seoul Educational Institution’s law course for high school students.
After taking the course, she was able to feel positive about her future.
All things considered, I strongly believe that it is necessary for
educational institution to teach students about professional knowledge for the
reasons I have mentioned above. All in all, the importance of learning jobs
cannot be overestimated in the pursuit of happiness in life. (GOOD)
Writing 0–30 score scale: Limited (1-16) / Fair (17-23) / Good (24–30)
ADDRESSING TOPIC
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ORGANIZATION
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PROGRESSION AND COHERENCE
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LANGUAGE USE
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GRAMMAR
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GOOD
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GOOD
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GOOD
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GOOD
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GOOD
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각 카테고리별 SCORE: LIMITED / FAIR / GOOD
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