For most, change plays an
important role in their lives. There are many opinions regarding this topic,
but it is evident that people these days are more happy or satisfied with their
lives than people in the past. The concepts of efficiency and convenience
clearly show this point. (인트로 좋습니다!)
First of all, the change of the world makes people's lives much
efficient. Many people can utilize their resources and make the most of their
time. Therefore, due to the changes of the world, people do not need to worry
about wasting so much of their time. A good
example is my sister's case. My sister had a foreign boyfriend in 1997. Because
of the absence of technology, she could not
communicate with her boyfriend without writing
letters. The fact that she had to take the
airplane to meet her boyfriend, (comma를 생략할 수 있는 상황에는 해주세요.) added to her struggles
from stress. However, since on 2000, the cell phone and the computer
were invented, which enabled her to communicate with
her with her boyfriend more efficiently. Not only did she spend five minutes to
contact with her boyfriend, but could save time to contact with her
boyfriend. Also, the time she saved was used for
other things, such as studying. This example would apply to other people who
live in the continuously changing technology
world. They will become more happy and satisfied with their lives.
Second, the world
varying from time to time (표현이 매우 어색합니다. 때마다 다른 세상이란 말인가요?) makes people's lives much more
convenient. Most of the people would be satisfied with their lives because transitions
variations in the transportation have made their movement more freely than
before. Actually, we can go to a country countries
all around the world within one day at the
present, due to the development of airplanes.
This fact has made people transportation
more convenient. Moving to another country with
by ships was too slow. It took more than one days
to travel a country when the airplane was not developed. However, as changing
the transportation technology of the world changed,
it affected in people's lives. It is not necessary to worry about
wasting so much time to travel these days.
Therefore, people now are
happier than people in the past because the airplane make people's lives much
comfortable than those in the past.
To some, it may seem
like people nowadays are unfortunate or not satisfied with their lives.
However, through the two examples related to efficiency and convenience, one
can logically concludes that people now are much more happier (happier이 이미 더 행복한, 이란 뜻이기 때문에 more을 생략해 주세요) than people
in the past.
(결론 문단은 하나로 해주시는게 더 자연스럽습니다)