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Some people believe that luck plays an important role in achieving success succeeding. In my opinion, hard work is the most important factor for success. This is because success without hard work is like winning a lottery which is an extraordinary occasion. Moreover, when someone believes that his or her success is thanks to only luck determines one's success, he or she would not make further effort to succeed and would fail at the end.
To begin with, there are not many cases that one could succeed just because he or she is lucky. The possibility is so low that it is sometimes compared to the possibility to win a lottery which is an extraordinary case. That means you should not expect to succeed with luck but make an effort to realize your dream. A study was conducted by National Lifecycle Committee to investigate consensus view on success with 500 employees as respondents. Overwhelming 93% of respondents replied that they felt accomplished when they put much effort on the project and finally succeeded in their field.
On top of that, when someone firmly believes that only luck determines one's success his or her success is thanks to luck, he or she would not put much effort to improve the work. He or she would probably wait for another luck to succeed and would finally lose the game. My experience on Toefl would be a good example. I took TOEFL test 5 months ago and received 30 points out of 30 in Reading section. I felt so happy that I got higher grade than expected when considering my actual reading abilities. I expected to receive good grade in Reading again with luck and instead studied more on Listening section instead. However, I only Finally I got 28 in Listening while 20 in Reading which is not a good grade.
To sum up, I firmly believe that luck does not play an important role in succeeding because success without hard work has very low probability. Moreover, even if someone succeeded thanks to luck, he or she would not make much effort further and likely to fail at the end.
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