▶ Your Answer :
In the
lecture, the speaker contends that the theories suggested in the reading
passage are groundless. (주제가 뭔지 먼저 언급하시는 게 좋아요.) Therefore,
she casts doubt on the reading passage's point that brain size has gradually
decreased for several reasons.
To
start with, the lecturer asserts that it is unlikely that more convenient and
large human societies have caused an decrease in brain size. She points
out that these days, complex mental processes require people to use their
brain. For example, nowadays, people have to interact with diverse people so
they need to develop social skills. This is in direct opposition to the
reading's argument that the decline in brain size has been caused by more
comfortable and large human societies. (좋습니다. 조금 아쉬운 점은 먼저 reading passage의 입장을 언급하시고, 그 다음에 lecturer의 반박 이유를 언급하시는 게 더 자연스러워요.)
On top
of that, the speaker argues that the a decline in human body size cannot
contribute to the drop in brain size. To be specific, many experts show that
the human body has shrunk at a faster rate than the brain did. If the decrease
in human body size had been an important reason
for the reduction in brain mass, the brain would have been shrunk at a
similar rate. This is contradictory to the reading passage's assertion that the
decrease in human body size has led the brain to shrink.
Lastly,
the speaker maintains it is unreasonable that the visual cortex, the part of
the brain responsible for making visual data, has resulted in the drop in brain
mass. She supports her idea by saying that this part consists of a very small
part of the brain. Therefore, this cannot cause a formidable change in brain
size even though the visual cortex has significantly shrunk. This rebuffs the
reading's insistence that the visual cortex is the reason for the reduction in
the brain mass.
Writing
0-30 Score Scale |
Good (24-30) |
Score |
26 |
Overall
Comment: |
Good job! 아주 사소한 문법
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