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Some people believe that working five days a week with shorter hours is better to work than working three days with longer hours. However, I believe that working only three days is much better way to work for both us ourselves and workplace both for the following two reasons. First, we can concentrate on our works better if we have a plenty of time to take a rest. Second, a quality of our lives might be better with a long rest time. To begin with, a long resting time is much beneficial to our productivity at workplaces. It is because we can relax ourselves and refresh our minds during the long weekends. On the other hand, if we can just take a rest for two days a week, we cannot refresh ourselves enough to concentrate on work during the weekdays. For example, when I started my work at first, I used to work six days a week and sometimes spent time on work every day. As a time went on, however, I felt my body heavy and sluggish and even could not work well. My productivity at work decreased, and consequently, I could not read any text at all. It was because I was being too much exhausted. So, I took a vacation. It was just a short time for four days, but It was really helpful to relieve my stress, so after the vacation, I could work better. From the experience, I truly understand the importance of a rest. Taking a full rest through four days off is thoroughly conducive to our work productivity and efficiency. In this regard, I strongly believe that it will be much better to have a long time to relax for four days a week. On top of that, the longer relax is really advantageous to ourselves. (In what way?) If we can take a rest only two days a week, we do not have a time enough time to be with our families, friends, or any other relationships. Or cannot or we cannot take a trip to abroad because it must take a long time. Furthermore, we may not have a hobby such as playing soccer, playing the piano, and climbing. (Maybe it can be done during the weekends) Some people say that we can do all these activities at weekdays if we work only short hours. However, I disagree with the idea because we will be exhausted after work albeit short. On the contrary, if we just work for three days a week, we may have a plenty of time to do all the things. We can go trip with our families or we can make a special hobby. These activities truly improve a quality of our lives. Therefore, I think that working only three days with long weekends is better than working five days with shorter hours because it will make our lives better. In short, not only does our productivity at workplace increase with longer rest time, but also we can improve a quality of our lives by doing some activities at the time. It will be a kind of killing to birds with one stone. Therefore, I believe that working only three days is much better than working five days with shorter working hours.
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