▶ Your Answer :
Undoubtedly, making decisions is an
important part of our lives. Some might think hasty decisions are never the
right ones. However, if I were asked, I would say hasty decisions can be not
only right but also benefitial beneficial sometimes. There are several reasons and examples
as follows. First of most, To begin with, making choices in a short
time can increase an overall happiness in life. This is because when people spend
too much time thinking over things like costs and benefits and every little detail,
it tends to stress them out. Generally speaking, a lot of worries and stress make
people unhappy and unsatisfied with their life. For example, my sister is a very
careful person who make makes every decision on the basis of her thorough plans in
advance. She spent a certain amount of time everyday to consider her plan and
decide. One day, she decided to go on a trip to Europe for a month. She was too
stressed that she had to make a very detailed plan for her long trip. But she
did not have enough time for that and made up her mind to improvise when she
actually arrive there. After she came back home, she told me that she was more
relaxed once she decided not to make plans. Furthermore, she said she even enjoyed
the trip better by finding hidden places to visit and eat because she did not
have a fixed schedule. After that, she has become more laid-back and flexible when
it comes to making a choice and looks happier than before. If she had not experieneced
this, she would still think she has to make decisions with careful consideration
and it would stress her out.
All things considered, I disagree that hasty
decisions are never right for the reason and the case I have mentioned above. Making
hasty decisions can sometimes have advantages. Fair: 17~23 점수: 22 너무나 장황하게 한 단락에 본인의 의견을 전달하려고 만 합니다. 이렇게 서술하시면 너무 장황하다라는 느낌이 듭니다. 너무나 많은 정보들이 들어가있어서 전반적으로 이 에세이를 통해서 어떠한 말을 전하려고 하는 것인지 잘 알 수 가 없습니다. 따라서 한 단락으로 본인의 의견을 정리하려고 하는 것 보다는 두 개 이상의 이유를 사용하여서 본인의 에세이를 서술하는 것이 더 효과적이고 명확하게 본인의 의견을 전달 할 수 있을 거 같습니다. 수고많으셧습니다. |