In the reading passage, there is ample support for the author's claim that
smart cars promise to make driving safer, quicker and cheap. However the
professor in the lecture gives several reasons as a rebuttal to the author's
point.
First, the professor contends that there still hasve
a chance to get an accident. Since smart cars
allow other cars to become packed tightly
in the road, there will be so many cars in the road. Thus, it is more possible to break out an accident. This casts
doubt on the reading passage's claim that smart cars will prevent many
accidents.
Next, the professor insists that if convenience becomes higher, the more
people will drive in the road. Increasing of drivers can not decreases the commute time. This is because conjunction is
the result of many cars. This refutes the reading passage's assertion
that traffic jam will be disappear due to the smart cars.
Finally, the professor argues that the idea we
can save a lot of money is not reasonable. Smart cars are globally expensive.
In addition, smart cars' sensor is highly expensive than conventional cars.
This counters the reading passage's suggestion that smart cars will bring a
reduction in the costs of driving.
Fair (17-20)
첫번째 본문
-주어-동사 수 일치 a chance-has
-an accident
-tightly 부자연스러운 표현입니다. packed 가 더 자연스럽습니다.
-this-casts 주어-동사 수 일치
두번째 본문
-if convenience becomes higher 보다 if smart cars bring more convenience, more people will drive in the road가 더 자연스러운 표현입니다.
-cannot 붙여서 씁니다.
-cannot 뒤에는 동사 원형입니다. decreases-->decrease
-노란 부분 이해하기 어려운 표현입니다.
세번째 본문
-finally, 접두사 뒤에 , 써주세요.
전체적으로 reading 의 내용이 적습니다. 더 보충해주세요.
또한, 문법 오류가 많습니다. 언급된 부분들 개선해주세요. 문장 표현력 길러주세요.
수고하셨습니다~~