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Some people are used to think ambitious
goals in life, which are nearly impossible to achieve. (Incomplete sentence) However, I think that it
is better for people to set a realistic aspiration to achieve their ultimate
goal. There are two reasons for that. The one reason is that people often cannot
endure an enormous task for of their ambitious goals. And the other reason is that
the world we are living in is ever changing so that it can be nearly impossible
to set ambitious goals because of uncertainty of world.
First, People having ambitious goals in
life are highly likely to give up are quitting their original plan because of the burdensome tasks they have to serve to achieve
their goals are often so burdensome to them. The ambitious goals are something
like arduous journey in life so they contain many difficult problems that people
have to solve. For example, when I was a high school student, I had a plan to
entering a the most prestige university, but there has was so many steps I have to take (such as getting a higher GPA, active extra curricular activities and a letter of reference from well-known teachers ) things to study. So I
quitted studying and had have to spent a one more year to entering a the university. So I think it is better to pursue realistic aspirations rather than
dreaming ambitious goals.
The second reason is that the world we are
living now is ever changing, so it is nearly impossible to predict a situation
that will happen later, which make us difficult to set ambitious goals. When enormous
uncertainty exists, it is better for people to pursue realistic aspirations. For
instance, the person who wants to be getting rich quickly should invest his or her
money in stock market based on the realistic legitimate reasons and
aspirations, if not, he or she would lose their whole money and become poor. (What do you want to say?)
To sum up, I believe that it is better for
people to pursue realistic aspirations because of following two reasons: 1. firstly, people
usually cannot endure the enormous task of their ambitious goals and 2. It second, it is
nearly impossible to set ambitious goals in ever changing world.
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