◆ Delivery (Pronunciation and Intonation)
- 수정 사항 없습니다.
◆ Language Use (Grammar and Vocabulary)
- is because it also give me a new opportunity to apply to some universities in the United States
-> is because it also gives me the opportunities to apply to some universities ..
- whenever I travelled around
-> whenever I travelled around the globe
◆ Topic Development (Contents)
- 구조와 흐름이 좋고 설명이 잘 되어있습니다. 시간이 부족하지 않는 이상 마지막 문장으로, that's why I think it's really important 식의 문장보다, these are the reasons why I think it's really important for children to learn a second language이런식으로 정리를 해주시는 것이 더 좋을 것 같아요.
Independent Speaking Rubrics Score: 4