51-1
A friend of yours is going to have an important job interview and has asked for your advice.
What do you think your friend should do in order to have a successful job interview? Explain why.
◆ Delivery (Pronunciation and Intonation)
- I'd like에서 like의 [l] 발음을 더욱 강하게 해주세요.
- story 등에서 [o] 발음하실 때 입 모양을 더 0모양으로 해주시면 좋겠습니다.
◆ Language Use (Grammar and Vocabulary)
- who is going to have job interview
-> who is going to have a job interview
- he should maintain smiley face
-> he should maintain his smile
- he considers the interview as a important things
-> he considers the interview as an important event
- it is likely that they want to get know about him
-> they are likely to want to get to know about him more (그런데 to 사용이 너무 많아서 다른 표현으로 대체하시는 것이 더 좋을 것 같습니다)
◆ Topic Development (Contents)
- Practice self-introduction이랑 smile이 어떻게 그 사람을 serious하게 만들고 그 인터뷰를 진지하게 생각하는 사람으로 만드는지 논리력/설명이 부족합니다. 제시하신 이유와 설명의 연결고리가 명확하게끔 설명을 해주시면 좋겠습니다.
◆ Comments
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