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A friend of yours wants to open a business. What advice would you give your friend about what to sell and where to open the business?
◆ Delivery (Pronunciation and Intonation)
- 수정 사항 없습니다.
◆ Language Use (Grammar and Vocabulary)
- who carry on the coffee bottles
→ to study in a large group
- nearby the university
→ nearby a university (the university는 특정 대학을 의미합니다)
◆ Topic Development (Contents)
- 전체적인 구조가 잘 잡혀있습니다.
- 왜 coffee shop이 good atmosphere를 갖고 있는지에 대한 설명이 더 필요해보입니다.
- 1) university students drink a lot of coffee 2) university students need a place to meet up for team projects식으로 두 개 이유를 더 잘 phrase해주셨으면 좋겠습니다.
◆ Comments
- 더 정리된 설명이 필요합니다.
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