What sorts of problems do most cities have?
• popularity
• evertything is concentrated in the captial city
• captial city, Seoul, has faced overcrowding and decreasing popularity has become a big problem in other citis
• overcrowding leads real estate prices to increase needless to say about traffic jam
• others is going through lack of popularity and workforce
• government should make policies to dispense this problem of popularity imperatively.
Cities have many different kinds of problems, but I think the biggest concern is that popularity is concentrated in the capital city, which the capital is facing overcrowded population means captial city, Seoul, has faced overcrowding and decreasing popularity has become a big problem in other citis. More specifically, in Seoul, overcrowding leads real estate prices to increase, (이전에 말씀드렸듯이 제가 쉼표를 넣어드리는 경우 실제 말씀하실 때 쉬어가시면 됩니다.) needless to say about traffic jam. In the contrary, others is other cities are going through lack of popularity and workforce. I think this is because Seoul is a center of economy and culture. As a result, young people prefer to move in Seoul.
I think government should make policies to dispense this problem of popularity imperatively.
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수고하셨습니다 :)