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Well, about two years ago, during the opening party of our college, I had the pleasure of meeting a remarkable person whom I fondly refer to as Grandma 현정. Currently studying fine arts, I was immediately drawn to her when she mentioned her lifelong dream of becoming a painter since her childhood. I have known Grandma 현정 for two years since our initial meeting at the college's opening party. Throughout our continued encounters, we continued to share our passion for art and painting. Additionally, 현정 shared her experiences as a dedicated volunteer during her younger year She revealed that she had actively participated in volunteer work, offering assistance to those in need and making a positive impact on their lives. I was touched by her story. I'm in the same department as her, but I haven't taken the same class yet. If I have a chance, I want to have time to take classes and study with her. I would be want to study with 현정 for several reasons. Firstly, her unwavering dedication to her dream and her ability to overcome challenges inspire me to pursue my own artistic aspirations. Secondly, her selflessness as a volunteer demonstrates her empathy and compassion, qualities that I greatly admire and would like to cultivate in my own art work. Lastly, her talent in translating experiences into art showcases her creativity and ability to convey powerful messages through her work. In conclusion, I am happy to meet her and share each other's passion, and I look forward to studying together and having an impact on each other in the future. |