Part 1

- Did you do puzzles in your childhood?

Yes, I absolutely did puzzles in my childhood. I have some memories that sitting (→ of sitting) on the floor in my room, and I played (→ playing) some jigsaw puzzles, and sometimes I did a crossword in newspaper (→ solving crosswords in the newspaper). I love it (→ loved it).

- What do you do puzzles, during your trip or when you feel bored?

I usually do puzzles when I feel bored and need a mental break. I used (→ I use) a few puzzle apps on my phone, and I played when I go (→ I play while commuting) to work on the metro. When I'm traveling, I always take a book of number puzzles, such as Sudoku and crosswords, and It's perfect for killing a time in the flight (→ which are perfect for passing time during flights).

- Do you like word puzzles or number puzzles? Which is more difficult for you?

I like both, but I'd say I prefer to play (→ playing) word puzzles. And it's also difficult to me (→ They are also challenging for me) because I grew up speaking Korean, and I'm still learning English. So that's why it's really difficult (→ This makes them particularly difficult), but I find word puzzles very stimulating.

- Do you think it's good for older people to do puzzles?

Yes, sure. I think puzzles are perfect for people of all ages, but i (→ I) think they're especially helpful for older people. It's a good way to keep remain their memories function (→ maintain their memory function) and mental sharpness, so it's really crucial as they age.

Part 2

- Describe an important river/lake in your country.

Well, I want to say about (→ talk about) Lake Douglas. It's located in Cairns, Australia, and it's really big with a diameter of 30 km. It takes 30 minutes by boat to cross. And it looks like circle and surrounded by trees (→ It is circular and surrounded by trees). When I see it, I feel calm and cool. It's also a very important place because we use its water for drinking and agriculture. It helps people's life and also it's great place to have a rest (→ It supports people's lives and is a great spot for relaxation).

Part 3

- How can rivers/lakes benefit local people?

I think rivers and lakes are benefits (→ benefit) local communities. They are important sources of freshwater for drinking and agriculture. Also, they can provide some food through the fishing (→ provide food through fishing)and offer opportunities for relaxation and activities like swimming and boating.

- Do you think rivers/lakes attract tourists?

Yes, of course, rivers and lakes are major tourist attractions. They always offer natural beauty and opportunities for activities like fishing, swimming, and boating. And also, if many tourist visit river or lake (→ Additionally, if many tourists visit a river or lake), they are attracted to the pieceful (→ peaceful) atmosphere around the water.

- How do rivers/lakes affect local tourism?

Well, rivers and lakes can significantly affect local tourism. There are usually wide open areas around lakes, so it's really useful so we can develop these place (→ they can be developed) into places like hotels, restaurants, or activity centers. Also, It's good for water-based activities like (→ they are perfect for water activities such as) boating, fishing, and swimming. These are major attractions.

- Are rivers/lakes good for transport?

In the case of rivers, they are particularly good for transport. They were widely used for transportation in history, and they still are today. They provided nature way and great road so it's good for environment for world's transport (→ They provide a natural and environmentally friendly mode of transportation).

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