Tell me a time when you feel rewarded in your career ?
- I was working at night time and one when a customer walked in and ordered tea. She she wanted to have caffeine free (여기에서의 free 는 공짜가 아니라 ~없는의 뜻으로 적어주신 거죠? 그러면 그냥 앞 문장과 합쳐서 walked in and ordered a caffeine-free tea 정도로 하는 게 더 자연스러울 겁니다.)) so I suggested a couple of tea on the based on her preference of her taste. She she said it was very helpful and we started have a small chat and
I found out that she is was a leader of an entrepreneur club in England. She she also asked me if she could have a meeting here in certain times since she likes liked my service and the atmosphere of the store.
under Under the permission from the of boss, I could was able to say yes and she became a regular customer as coming that came every Wednesday at the end of the month with her crew of it was about 20 people
likewise, when I do what I like and it affect to bring more people and profit in my store (이 문장은 위에 드러난 사례를 전반적으로 요약하는 역할을 하죠. 그런데 현재 보시면 bring more people and profit 에 관한 내용은 위에 나와있지만, do what I like 에 관한 사항이 전혀 없어서 완전히 적합하다고 보기에는 조금 어려울 것 같습니다.), I feel a sense of achievement.
전반적으로 조금씩 어색한 부분이 있는 편이라 수정해드린 내용을 참고해서 다시 한번 연습해보시면 좋을 것 같습니다. 특히 마지막 문장은 꼭 한번 확인하고 바꿔주셔야겠고요. 수고하셨습니다 :)