PART 2
Describe someone you know who has started a business.
You should say:
who this person is
what work this person does
why this person decided to start a business
and explain whether you would like to do the same kind of work as this person.
There are several famous people who has started a business. And one of them is Steve Jobs, who is dead right now, but started a company called 'Apple' which became really big these days. He made some creative innovations such as an iPad, an iPod, or an iPhone. I don't know why he exactly started a business, but I guess he decided to start the business (여기는 웬만하면 패러프레이징 해주세요~) because he wanted to express his evolution spirit. His thinking was different from other people, so he wanted to show his own product that is different from other people's product. I would like to do the same kind of work as him, because I also major in computer science, and one of my dreams is to make innovative products that can change the world in a positive view. Therefore, Steve Jobs became my role model (한국어로 모델을 발음할 때와는 달리 ㅔ 가 크게 드러나서는 안 됩니다. 여기의 경우 사전의 녹음본을 한번 들어보시는 것도 좋을 것 같아요!) for his work and I want to follow what he did.
총평: 관사 문제가 있긴 했지만, 현실적으로 관사는 아무리 시간을 들여도 완벽하게 개선하기는 불가능한 영역이라 (원어민이 아닌 이상) 그냥 참고 정도만 해주세요~수고하셨습니다 :)
항상 감사합니다!