The first diagram shows how to make cement
and the second diagram depicts the process of making concrete from this cement.
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Looking at the first diagram, limestone and
clay is used for making cement. These materials are is crushed into powder going through the
crusher so that they are been powder. Before the powder goes into the rotating
heater, they are mixed. In the rotating heater, all of the mixed powder is
heated. Finally, a grinder grinds makes the heated and mixed powder into become cement, which and
is packaged in bags.
Concrete needs some of cement, 15%, 25% of
sand, 10% of water, and at last the most proportion of gravel, which takes the highest proportion of 50%, which is small
stones. All of these materials are put into a concrete mixer. The mixer Mixer rotates one
way and materials are mixed and into being concrete.
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