Technology has rapidly grown and now reached into nearly every aspect of
our lives including educational fields. Regarding this issue, some argue that technology
will take teacher’s job in school off in the future. I disagree with this opinion.
This essay will present why human teachers will not disappear in our society.
There are those with a belief that machine work as teacher is pretty
positive in many aspects. The primary ground that technology can solve the
social issues , which especially happen in school. There are a lot of problems
about wrong behavior of teachers nowadays, such as discrimination of students
regard of gender, level of living, nationality. These problems can be ease by
the machine, which excluded from private value and emotion. because they plays
a role of just deliver the knowledge and information to students. Another crucial
element why they believe the contention is that technology teaching is seen as
a great contributory factor in school financial. The most compelling evidence is
that machine has a variety range of knowledge compared to human, can be
possible to replace a various subject teachers with just one machine.
From the other standpoint, others are not content with the aforementioned
benefits; they insist that traditional teachers carry out multiple rules. Most of
teachers play a role not only an educator but also taking care of students at school.
They assist pupils to build their value, private problems with bond to each
other. What is more noticing is that traditional teachers guide their students
according to their educational ability. For example, If the teacher discovered a
students who didn’t understand a certain knowledge, and then teacher may tune
the explanation to level of their comprehension.
As described so far, It is acceptable said that technology has a various
benefits to our society. But for me, traditional teacher has more role, which machine
can not performed and technology has not yet advanced enough to replace to traditional
human teacher.
1. 목표하시는 점수 ; 6.0
2. 다음 시험 예정 날짜 ; 11/20 (수)
3. 이전에 시험을 치렀을 경우 그때의 점수, ; 9/23 (5.5) -> 11/2 (5)
4. 기타 현재 상황 ; 현재 공부는 샘플 에세이 주제별로 구문 외우면서 최대한 활용 할 수 있도록
샘플 구문 외우면서 공부하고 있고, 그 구문들 참고해서 제가 영작 해서 쓰고 있습니다.
제가 생각하는 제 문제는, 쓰다보면 글의 길이가 계속 길어 지는 것 같습니다ㅠㅠ
간결하게 쓴다고 쓰면 뒷받침 하는 내용이 너무 부족한거 같고, 고민입니다.
각 본문에 주장에 대한 근거를 하나만 적어도 되나요? 제가 보고 있는 책에선 기본 2개로
적으라고 되어있어서 맞춰 쓰려니 힘드네요ㅠㅠ
정말 늦어도 12월 중순까지 받아야 하는 점수가 overall 6 / each 5.5 인데
다른 과목들도 5.5 에서 오르지 않고 있어서. 6을 목표로 하고 있습니다.
빨리 점수를 받으려면 어떤 방식으로 접근해야 할까요 ㅠ_ㅠ 조언 부탁드립니다.
감사합니다:)