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<Topic> The crime
rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advance technology
which can prevent and solve crime. To what
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These days, lots
of people carry their smartphones and are able to call police officers whenever
they encounter mugging or looting. However, while these people can protect
themselves from unpleasant crime, there are some people say that crimes are
not able to be foreseeable and technologies are not the right answer to resolve
the problems. I would like to opine that I agree with the latter point of
view. Firstly, there
are innumerable criminal offenses which can be happened behind the surveillance camera
and portable electronic devices, for example, rape, child abuse and family violence. The aforementioned crimes Furthermore,
although some offences are reported by taking evident video and contact to the
guards, I do not consider that undeveloped countries are also able to have
these benefits. Since the majority of people in the nations do not have smartphones
or surveillance cameras at the entrance of their home, in addition, owing to a
social system and atmosphere, the offences’ report ratio might be low and
sometimes policemen do not care about this report To sum up, despite
advanced human technologies, it is hard to say that all nations on the Earth enjoy
those advantages and the crime rate has fell down. Therefore, I firmly believe
that enhanced technologies are not able to block suspects intentions and be
solution of crimes. |
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