Your Answer ▼ This table shows that the number of Manchester University enrolled students (단순히 등록 학생의 수만 보여주는 것은 아니므로, 더 자세한 표현이 필요합니다.) in 1937, 1967 and 2017.
Overall, it is clear that the percentage of male students was higher than the percentage of female students. (기간 내내 남성의 비율이 높은 건 아니므로, 이러한 표현은 적절하지 않습니다.) The number of students who live in far from Manchester and come from oversea increased.
Looking at the table more closely, one can see that the number of enrolled new students surged from 327 in 1937 to 6,254 in 2017. The proportion of male students accounted for 55 percent in 1937 and 65 percent in 1967. It was higher than the proportion of female students, which was 45 percent in 1937 and 35 percent in 1967. However, in 2017, the percentage of female students accounted for 55 percent and it exceeded the percentage of male students, accounting for 45 percent. By increasing the number of enrolled students, (이 문장, 즉 '등록 학생의 수를 증가시킴으로써' 라는 표현이 뒤의 사항들에 대해 인과관계로 이어질 수는 없습니다.) the portion of students who live within 40 miles of Manchester decreased from 55 percent in 1937 to 1 or 2 percent in 2017 and also the percentage of enrolled students who came from oversea increased approximately five times from 6 percent in 1937 to 32 percent in 2017. (문장이 너무 길어지면 비문이 될 확률만 높일 뿐이므로, 여기서 끊어가주시고, 추가적으로 단순히 해외 유학생의 비율만 증가한 것이 아니라, 이들의 출신 국가도 훨씬 다양해졌습니다. 이 내용을 잘 반영해주셔야 해요.) |