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Some argue that economical difficulties play a key role for the reason of crime, while others believe that one person’s nature makes him or her commit a crime. Although both views are worth exploring, I think that criminals usually commit crime because of their economically disadvantaged environments.
On the one hand, some psychologists acclaim that someone who is born to be evil is more likely to commit crime compared to others. To be specific, a lower sense of sympathy of one person makes him or her be a criminal since he or she does not know how much others would be suffered from their crime. (<----이 문장의 경우 문법 오류는 없긴 한데, 개인적으로는 아예 him or her 등을 대신해서 복수인 people 쪽으로 싹 묶어서 수정하는 것을 추천드립니다.) In several crime cases, it rose a wonder from many people why several criminals who have affluent family murder others. Many of these cases the reasons of the crime is their evil nature.
On the other hand, money is the key to living in this commercialized society. If someone has not enough money, they are likely to commit crimes because less money decreases the chance of receiving better educational opportunities, resulting in low-income jobs. This detrimental cycle would be repeated continuously, which makes them steal someone else’s. For example, the majority of criminals in Korea who committed theft or burglary reported that they only graduated from middle school to make money for a living and had no evil means to steal others’ but to survive. (이정도면 그래도 6.5-7.0 선에서 용납 가능한 정도까지는 끌어올리신 것 같습니다.) To sum up, society has become more commercialized, thus having enough cash is essential for life and for preventing crime. For economically disadvantaged people, they know that they are doing wrong but there is no choice but to do crime to survive these days. Therefore, I firmly believe that poverty is the main cause of crime.
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