Some people believe that developments in the field of artificial intelligence will have a positive impact on our lives in the near future. Others, by contrast, are worried that we are not prepared for a world in which computers are more intelligent than humans. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.
Recently, the popularity of artificial intelligence is rising, according to preferring convenience that this can bring. Like this, some people think that the advancement of artificial intelligence helps individuals to live more comfortable. Meanwhile, others say that people are not ready to stay in the world of artificial intelligence. I will discuss the two views and present my opinion.
Researchers who support the development of artificial intelligence claim that individuals can be protected in risky workplace with the help of computers. This is because a variety of robots are appearing as artificial intelligence are advanced. To be precise, in radiation research laboratories, researchers in the past could not have a baby or may die if they are exposed to a of high level of radiation. In the case of, However human beings can be are replaced by robots and the workers do not need to work in dangerous workplace in the present. A variety of robots also have the fixed regulations, which brings about the least errors when they work and they are not affected by biological conditions.
However, opponents Opponents say that lots of workers will lose their job gradually because artificial intelligence invade employee's work positions. Although robots work in difficult workplaces in these days, they will extend their position more and more. As a result, people will be deprived of their workplace since the costs of robots are not expensive compared to human workforce. The technology of artificial intelligence have has a possibility of errors and defects, and this means limitation of machine. If bosses in companies provide their worker with enough rest time and proper work environment, employees can work more accurately and quickly compared to correct and faster than robots.
In conclusion. artificial intelligence have advantages and draw backs as machines. I think that the technology of artificial intelligence may invade our lives in ways such as deprivation of human's work.
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