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Recently, the removal of old building has become a fiercely controversial issue. Some people assert that old buildings should be replaced with new buildings, while others argue that people should preserve old buildings. Personally, I believe that both arguments should be given equal weight. In the following essay, the evidence supporting this contention will be discussed alongside relevant examples. (여기서 띄어야 합니다. 이것도 점수에 들어가요.)
On the one hand, it seems difficult to refute the idea that human beings should have the right to keep old facilities. Perhaps an obvious disadvantage of getting rid of these facilities is that a multitude of old amenities are playing an important role in the field of tourism industry. As an illustration, one recent study conducted by the Seoul National University analyzed that the reason why foreigners foreingers visit South Korea and it turned out that the main reason is traditional Korean korean buildings. (일단 문법 수정은 해드렸지만, 여기도 그냥 앞의 말의 반복에 불과합니다.) In addition, some of these buildings allow pupils to learn about their history, which exerts positive influences on educating them. For these reasons, there does seem to be a solid basis for several of the arguments in favour of keeping old buildings. On the other hand, it seems short-sighted to contend that old amenities merely bring with positives. The most oft-cited argument against such a view is that new facilities often contribute to an increase in citizen's life satisfcation. To exemplify, one notable traditional palace in China was converted into a national museum and according to one article released by the Beijing Times, about 60% of local residents were satisfied with this change. (여기도 마찬가지입니다. '왜' 만족했는지를 적지 않는 이상 앞의 말의 반복에 지나지 않아요. 단순히 만족했다! 로는 아무런 의미가 없습니다.) Furthermore, constructing new buildings make it possible for the government to boost economy since it creats a multitude of employment opportunities related to the consturction. In light of the above, I also find these persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, it can be concluded that each side of the debate has its strengths, as discussed above. (결론은 가급적이면 꼭 수정해주시고요~)
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