▶ Your Answer : These days,
diverse researches are conducted about an educational area in developing countries
because many experts believe that the one of the main solutions in the decreasing
socio-economic gap between developed countries and developing countries is
expanding for education or training to indigenous people. So >> 문두에 so also but and or 은 넣지 않습니다, some people
contend that young people who are under 15years old should have some compulsory some
types of schooling. I agree with this view and I will discuss the reasons below.
First of all,
generally children cannot realize the importance of education enough before
they become adults. According to a report, in the early age, children’s learning capability is not active but passive
and the speed of learning is very astonishing. Therefore, a systematic education plan
or curriculum is crucial, which is compulsory guided by experts instructors in learning
area.
Secondly,
children, as a whole, cannot control their mind completely because of hormone,
which affects the second physical grow and severe fluctuating emotion>> mood swings. In
developing countries, if there is no compulsory education system or children
experiencing a very shocking event, they may be easily change their mind, even in process
of learning. For example, I travelled to India,>> 콤마 빼주세요 and I met an adult who is
working on the street was selling some products on the street. I had an opportunity to interview
with him and he told me that his life is too tough because of a socio-economic
reason. He regretted he stopped thoughtlessly his learning in the early age.
In conclusion,
I strongly maintain that compulsory education system in young ages is
absolutely necessary. Compared to the developed countries, this tendency is needed
to be strengthened more in developing countries because they easily tend to
shake easily their will of learning according to their economic conditions or social
status. Therefore, some types of compulsory education systems have to be
established in nation’s perspective.
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