Technology seems to be doing more harm than good these days. Do you think scientists should stop being innovative and inventive and just solely focus their attention on solving the problems in the environment? Give reasons to support your answer.
It is widely accepted that developed technology has a number of negative effects on people’s lives. Thus, the majority of the public says that scientists should stop developing technology, which could destruct the environment, and should spend more of their time on solving the problems. In this essay, I will elaborate on the weaknesses of being only innovative without considering environmental issues.
In the first place, people are likely to be less healthy as technology developed. The chief reason is that technology usually provides people with a comfortable and , >> 형용사가 나란히 온다면 콤마만 넣어서 해주세요 다만 두 형용사의 성격이나 꾸며주는 대상이 다르다면 콤마 없이 나열하시면 됩니다 convenient life. In spite of this, the other side of it could bring more harm than benefits on them. For example, smart phones or SNS(Social Network Service) >> social networking is a hindrance for people to have outdoor activities. >> 길어서 끊었습니다 It is because of due to the fact that they want to stay at home more and just use those technologies modern ones, while lying down on their beds. Consequently, they would get have >> get동사는 좋지 않다는 걸 말씀드리고 싶습니다 뜻이 너무 많습니다 a lot of health problems such as obesity, failing of bad eyesight, high blood pressure, and other illnesses caused by sedentary lifestyles.
In the second place, being ingenious and original means that many raw materials for technology have to be used>> ??. The typical example is woods. It is a fact that people can live with the oxygen is emitted from trees. >> however 는 두 문장을 이어주는 기능이 없습니다 However, if scientists say that they have to exploit them for their research and development, oxygen will >> 주절 조동사 if절 동사 시제 맞춰주세요 disappear soon. In the long run, people on the Earth will die. In addition, according to a survey carried out in 2012, 80% of respondents answered that everyone, especially scientists, should make an effort to solve the issues in the environment as soon as possible. Surely, people must protect and thank nature for their lives.>> 굳이 survey가 동원되어야 할 부분이라곤 생각이 들지 않습니다 또한 정리가 자연에게 감사하란 얘기는 살짝 엇나간 느낌입니다
All things considered, continuous development of technology is not much important. This is because it can cause a number of problems for people. Therefore, further efforts are required to protect and keep our environment clean.
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