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Before and after the tourist development, the map of the island changes mainly in regard to the construction of some tourist facilities. >> map 이 change 한 것도 아닙니다 문장 구조도 이상하구요 서론에서 볼 듯한 글이 아닙니다 모르겠다면 다른 task1 글들 참고해보시구요 The pictures illustrate the changes of an island, comparing before and after the building. 정도로 쓰시면 되겠네요
The natural environment does not show significant changes of features. There is still the beach in the west most tip of the island. Palm trees remains in places>>??. Most of the trees cluster in the east, some in the west place. >> 동사는 어딨나요? 이 문단 자체가 딱히 글에서 효과적인 역할은 하지 않는 듯 싶네요
However, there are several notable changes in the feature of artificial improvements for tourism activities. The pier is built in the south coast. Neart the coast, there are two yachts for sailing anchored . The pier is connected to vehicle track that surrounds a newly-built reception and then reaches also a newly-built restaurant northward. Accommodations areas are built, divided into the two parts by the location of the reception. The eastern complex consists of 9 lodges in a circle and the western complex consits of 6 lodges encircling a clump of trees >> complex consists of ~~ 반복 형태 좋지 않습니다 바꿔주세요. Lodges of each complex are linked by footpath. The western footpath leads to the beach where now tourist can enjoy swimming >> 지도만 보고 알 수 있나요?.
Overall, as suggested in the new map, several tourist facilities for tourist including routes and buildings are constructed, while the natural geography is reserved. The resort mainly reaches the west and the middle. This>>this 만 쓰지 말고 뒤에 뭐 더 써주세요 this accommodation 같은 식으로요 changes dramatically the landscape of island dramatically.
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